OK, I am now many many hours into this. I gave it a fair trial. Here's my thoughts. First, to make a great AVN you need 3 things. The visuals have to be amazing, the story has to be incredible, and the dialogue has to be on point. If any one of these is off, the AVN could very well suck. I have read through probably 150 AVN's at this point. So I think I can recognize a decent one.
The visuals in MBD are simply unbelievable. The stills and the animations both are stunning. I don't think I can give a high enough rating to the visuals. They are among the best I've ever seen.
The dialogue, as I mentioned previously, needs a lot of work. Not only is there a lot of spelling and grammar mistakes, but a lot of the story is ruined by the author's inability to set a standard for the story and follow it. In the beginning, they establish that Molly owns a house and everyone else just lives there, they aren't related. But the two girls are twins, but not sisters, but are? And Molly isn't Mom, but they sometimes call her Mom? And the word neighbor is used in place of brother or sister throughout the story to make sure the reader knows they aren't related. But they act exactly like they are related, and it's taboo to have sex with each other. BTW, instead of neighbor, the author should use the word roommate, at least in the English translation. So this is either an AVN where its another guy fucking Mom and sisters trope, or it isn't. And the dialogue is very bad at explaining that.
Which leads me to the story itself. Overall, I like the concept of the story. Two goddesses vying for control of a mortal to further their existence while the MC has to deal with shit of his own. Kind of fun. But the telling of the story through the dialogue is NOT working. The arch is great, the execution isn't. Most of the people don't talk to each other they way they should at all for most of the situations they are in. The writing feels very elementary. I would be surprised if the author is older than 25. Don't get me wrong. there are a lot of amazing elements in this story, but the telling of it is not well executed. I made it as far as the conversation with Molly right after MC hooked up with Annie. At this point I had to nope out of it. Why would what they are doing be taboo if no one is actually related? If they aren't related, why do they all act like they are?
To sum up, Visuals = Fucking Incredible. Story = Not terrible, needs more thought put into it. Dialogue = Translation isn't bad, but everything about the grammar is, and it's clear the author doesn't have an understanding how to write for English speaking personalities. Using the Guy fucks Mom and Sisters trope is terrible, lazy, and way overdone. This is not meant to be an insult. It is an honest review, and I hope the author learns from it, and can make the corrections needed to make this a great project. The basics are there, it just needs to be cleaned up, and rewritten in a few spots. It has potential for a great AVN. I just think these things need to be corrected before the story goes any further.
I agree with every last thing you said, other than the trope issues you have with the game. I think that the whole "taboo incest fetish" thing isnt going anywhere. It is still a hugely popular fetish and i think many devs and authors should continue implementing it. Not all porn game fetishes need to be brand new, unique and innovative. In fact, I find it better when the fetishes are widespread, but remain the same tags they've always been. Personally I find the whole "roommates/landlord" thing annoying af. Either have the balls to go with what you meant for it to be, or create a completely different scenario.
You ARE right, however when it comes to flow, context and consistency... The author needs to clean that up, as it was obviously meant to be a taboo incest game, but they cleaned it up (horribly) for some reason. As far as the grammar, they should get someone that can translate (if thats what they did) into english much much better. Or at least write the language fluently and eloquently instead of making it sound like a third grader wrote this.
But other than that, I completely agree with everything else. And I also quite enjoyed the game. This site definitely has much worse out there...
Starting with 3.3. I am 10 minutes in, and I can already tell the dialogue is..basic. Obviously translated to English from something else. The story is following the trope of hooking up with Mom and sisters. (this is a tired and lazy trope) But in this one, they go out of the way to say they are not Mom and sisters at the beginning. But as soon as MC meets the girls, they call each other brother and sisters. The dialogue needs some cleaning up. There were noticeable spelling and grammar mistakes also. I will keep playing, and even will buy it through Patreon if I like it. Good work should be paid for. I guess we will see where the story goes.
The experience of version 3.3 was extremely pleasant, so I tried version 3.9. I particularly liked Rin and Annie and regarded them as my girlfriends. But when I reached the content of version 3.6, everything went to mess. At that time, I didn't realize that Rin had lost control. Especially in the bathroom scene, I chose to allow her to use that hole. Because my English was poor, I mistakenly thought that the protagonist should go to the next room to interact with her. Unexpectedly, there were unexpected consequences. My mood changed from disappointment to anger to regret. Later, I reflected on the various behaviors between the protagonist and Rin, and combined with Hecate's warning to me, I was worried that Rin was only infatuated with the protagonist due to the influence of love power. I was very clear about Rin's inner desires, so whenever I selected content that made Rin unhappy, I would immediately click back. From the thesis presentation to the evening walk, I was trying my best to make her satisfied without letting others notice, but perhaps what she really wanted was not these. I'm not sure about your thoughts when creating the character Rin. To be honest, there are still many mysteries that remain unsolved. However, if the protagonist doesn't realize the side effects of love power, I'm afraid the subsequent plot will increasingly exceed the boundaries.
The good news is that you didn't place that unpleasant part separately in the gallery, so I can gradually forget this scene. I'm very much looking forward to the future plot development. After all, this story still has a lot of content to be developed. If you have the task of translating into Chinese during the game production, I would be very glad to offer my full assistance.
After reading the comments of others, I realized that MBD needs more options. Joining Sharing was indeed a very bold decision, but I merely suggested that more diverse choices be placed within an acceptable range, or to avoid the occurrence of the event if the wrong option is chosen. Of course, this means more production volume, so I respect your decision and will not oppose your work results.
You're confusion is not unfounded. Read my post above. It was poorly translated to English as well. The author doesn't seem to be able to tell the story properly. There are a lot of data points within the story that don't make sense. I think the author is relying heavily on the beautiful visuals to carry the story.
Should give more choices imo, would be much better if that was the case, for instance I have absolutely no interest in molly and always skip the scenes and the talks after. Shouldnt be forced to have relations with certain people, or be forced into where the MC dislikes or disapproves with his newer power and special friend. Would be fun to go entirely down her path.
I haven't tested it on PC, but you can directly install the new version of the game on Android to overwrite the old one, and the save data of the old version will be retained.
I've played my fair share of AVNs and some with a very similar premise to this (Shattered, Goddess Whim) but this, wow, really good man!! From the beautiful renders, the subtle animations to the full on H scenes, glorious. A bit of my fetish of choice (pee) thrown in too helps! I did find myself shouting at the MC sometimes "Just use you power and show that Ahole who's boss" 🤣 Massive shout-out to Pirot King for amazing work, some of the best I've seen, throw them a few quid if you can! 10/10! Hope to see more of this glorious work in the future.
Hello, author, is there any NTR content in the game? If not, will there be in the future? I don't want to see such content, I like the harem, thank you!
Are you kidding? I finished the whole game. There were no ntr scenes and options, but there was a sharing scene (although I didn't like this one either). I just hoped it would be a harem and more threesome scenes.
the ntr thing @UnderscorM3 is talking about is and isnt ntr...theres this whole arc with lin and rin where lin liked rin but rin was getting fucked by the mc the entire time and lin couldnt do much ab it besides just having dreams ab rin...could be ntr? idk
That's hardly NTR. If either other chicks were getting dicked by another dude then I'd be piss about it. Couldn't care less if MC's girls are banging each other, that shit is hot and could open up threesomes later on.
My brother in Christ, I’m not some goon scholar. I barely even know what the hell NTR is outside of one or two hentai where the main guy’s girl gets fucked by someone else. I just thought it might count as slight NTR because the same dynamic is happening: Lin likes Rin, but Rin’s getting railed by the MC while Lin’s left dreaming about her. Which, I’m sure, has a lot of similarities with the thought process of a cuck. I don’t even get why you care this much about what counts as NTR when you’re literally gooning over fictional characters smashing each other.
Even if the version on itch is the free public version, would you consider making it a “name your price”? I don’t mind supporting the project a bit, but I’m not one bit interested in subscriptions. Either that, or please add the button to support the project with one time donations
EDIT: Actually tried to play the game. My apologies to anyone who thought I was defending the dialogue and plot development I hadn't seen yet. I stand by my statement that there's a difference between NTR and sharing, but... I'm not sure what's happening here. Made it as far as the meeting with Mrs. Collins before I quit in disgust - the dialogue reads like someone's cuckoldry fetish fanfiction. Downvotes earned, lesson learned - I shouldn't chime in unless I know what I'm talking about.
Way too many people in these comments either can't tell the difference between involuntary NTR and consensual sharing, or can't stand the thought of their multiple partners sleeping with anyone else (despite being perfectly comfortable asking them all to share the MC). The hypocrisy and entitlement runs deep.
Me personally? The thing that bugs me about NTR is the nonconsent/humiliation aspect, not the sharing aspect. If everyone's on the same page and agrees to it, play ball.... Pirot, keep doing what you do and screw the haters.
(Disclaimer: haven't played the game myself - commenting on this after reading down through the comments to see if I wanted to. Sounds less like an "NTR bait-and-switch" and more like "people pissed at the concept of their girls having the freedom to do what the MC is doing," but someone feel free to correct me if I'm wrong.)
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Any road map? When the story is completely finished?
OK, I am now many many hours into this. I gave it a fair trial. Here's my thoughts.
First, to make a great AVN you need 3 things. The visuals have to be amazing, the story has to be incredible, and the dialogue has to be on point. If any one of these is off, the AVN could very well suck. I have read through probably 150 AVN's at this point. So I think I can recognize a decent one.
The visuals in MBD are simply unbelievable. The stills and the animations both are stunning. I don't think I can give a high enough rating to the visuals. They are among the best I've ever seen.
The dialogue, as I mentioned previously, needs a lot of work. Not only is there a lot of spelling and grammar mistakes, but a lot of the story is ruined by the author's inability to set a standard for the story and follow it. In the beginning, they establish that Molly owns a house and everyone else just lives there, they aren't related. But the two girls are twins, but not sisters, but are? And Molly isn't Mom, but they sometimes call her Mom? And the word neighbor is used in place of brother or sister throughout the story to make sure the reader knows they aren't related. But they act exactly like they are related, and it's taboo to have sex with each other. BTW, instead of neighbor, the author should use the word roommate, at least in the English translation. So this is either an AVN where its another guy fucking Mom and sisters trope, or it isn't. And the dialogue is very bad at explaining that.
Which leads me to the story itself. Overall, I like the concept of the story. Two goddesses vying for control of a mortal to further their existence while the MC has to deal with shit of his own. Kind of fun. But the telling of the story through the dialogue is NOT working. The arch is great, the execution isn't. Most of the people don't talk to each other they way they should at all for most of the situations they are in. The writing feels very elementary. I would be surprised if the author is older than 25. Don't get me wrong. there are a lot of amazing elements in this story, but the telling of it is not well executed. I made it as far as the conversation with Molly right after MC hooked up with Annie. At this point I had to nope out of it. Why would what they are doing be taboo if no one is actually related? If they aren't related, why do they all act like they are?
To sum up, Visuals = Fucking Incredible. Story = Not terrible, needs more thought put into it. Dialogue = Translation isn't bad, but everything about the grammar is, and it's clear the author doesn't have an understanding how to write for English speaking personalities. Using the Guy fucks Mom and Sisters trope is terrible, lazy, and way overdone. This is not meant to be an insult. It is an honest review, and I hope the author learns from it, and can make the corrections needed to make this a great project. The basics are there, it just needs to be cleaned up, and rewritten in a few spots. It has potential for a great AVN. I just think these things need to be corrected before the story goes any further.
I agree with every last thing you said, other than the trope issues you have with the game. I think that the whole "taboo incest fetish" thing isnt going anywhere. It is still a hugely popular fetish and i think many devs and authors should continue implementing it. Not all porn game fetishes need to be brand new, unique and innovative. In fact, I find it better when the fetishes are widespread, but remain the same tags they've always been. Personally I find the whole "roommates/landlord" thing annoying af. Either have the balls to go with what you meant for it to be, or create a completely different scenario.
You ARE right, however when it comes to flow, context and consistency... The author needs to clean that up, as it was obviously meant to be a taboo incest game, but they cleaned it up (horribly) for some reason. As far as the grammar, they should get someone that can translate (if thats what they did) into english much much better. Or at least write the language fluently and eloquently instead of making it sound like a third grader wrote this.
But other than that, I completely agree with everything else. And I also quite enjoyed the game. This site definitely has much worse out there...
Upvote for the great well-thought out review. ^_^
Starting with 3.3. I am 10 minutes in, and I can already tell the dialogue is..basic. Obviously translated to English from something else. The story is following the trope of hooking up with Mom and sisters. (this is a tired and lazy trope) But in this one, they go out of the way to say they are not Mom and sisters at the beginning. But as soon as MC meets the girls, they call each other brother and sisters. The dialogue needs some cleaning up. There were noticeable spelling and grammar mistakes also. I will keep playing, and even will buy it through Patreon if I like it. Good work should be paid for. I guess we will see where the story goes.
The experience of version 3.3 was extremely pleasant, so I tried version 3.9. I particularly liked Rin and Annie and regarded them as my girlfriends. But when I reached the content of version 3.6, everything went to mess. At that time, I didn't realize that Rin had lost control. Especially in the bathroom scene, I chose to allow her to use that hole. Because my English was poor, I mistakenly thought that the protagonist should go to the next room to interact with her. Unexpectedly, there were unexpected consequences. My mood changed from disappointment to anger to regret. Later, I reflected on the various behaviors between the protagonist and Rin, and combined with Hecate's warning to me, I was worried that Rin was only infatuated with the protagonist due to the influence of love power. I was very clear about Rin's inner desires, so whenever I selected content that made Rin unhappy, I would immediately click back. From the thesis presentation to the evening walk, I was trying my best to make her satisfied without letting others notice, but perhaps what she really wanted was not these. I'm not sure about your thoughts when creating the character Rin. To be honest, there are still many mysteries that remain unsolved. However, if the protagonist doesn't realize the side effects of love power, I'm afraid the subsequent plot will increasingly exceed the boundaries.
The good news is that you didn't place that unpleasant part separately in the gallery, so I can gradually forget this scene. I'm very much looking forward to the future plot development. After all, this story still has a lot of content to be developed. If you have the task of translating into Chinese during the game production, I would be very glad to offer my full assistance.
After reading the comments of others, I realized that MBD needs more options. Joining Sharing was indeed a very bold decision, but I merely suggested that more diverse choices be placed within an acceptable range, or to avoid the occurrence of the event if the wrong option is chosen. Of course, this means more production volume, so I respect your decision and will not oppose your work results.
Yeah hopefully the cucky/sharing stuff stays a very minor part of the game.
You're confusion is not unfounded. Read my post above. It was poorly translated to English as well. The author doesn't seem to be able to tell the story properly. There are a lot of data points within the story that don't make sense. I think the author is relying heavily on the beautiful visuals to carry the story.
Should give more choices imo, would be much better if that was the case, for instance I have absolutely no interest in molly and always skip the scenes and the talks after. Shouldnt be forced to have relations with certain people, or be forced into where the MC dislikes or disapproves with his newer power and special friend. Would be fun to go entirely down her path.
Hi, I tried to run it on my MacBook, but it's not working. Can you help me?
Hi! What's the issue? Are you getting any errors when you try to run it?
Thanks for the new update 😍
I love this serial. It would be great if you could revamp/rework Molly's looks to more younger or beautiful. 🤧
I hate when i need to replay from zero everytime when the newest patch launched and had to fuck with her is like the MC is Old hag lovers 😭😭😭
You just need to up your MILF game! Molly's a great character! I'd stick a ring on her. No wait I meant I'd stick it in her ring!?🤷🏻♂️🤣
I'd love milf in other games. But Molly's looks is uuuggghhh 😭😭
I haven't tested it on PC, but you can directly install the new version of the game on Android to overwrite the old one, and the save data of the old version will be retained.
I've played my fair share of AVNs and some with a very similar premise to this (Shattered, Goddess Whim) but this, wow, really good man!! From the beautiful renders, the subtle animations to the full on H scenes, glorious. A bit of my fetish of choice (pee) thrown in too helps! I did find myself shouting at the MC sometimes "Just use you power and show that Ahole who's boss" 🤣 Massive shout-out to Pirot King for amazing work, some of the best I've seen, throw them a few quid if you can! 10/10! Hope to see more of this glorious work in the future.
When you check for an update for the first time in ages... and it was made available 6 hours ago 🤯🫡🙏👍!
Thank you, much appreciated!
When the next Public Update?
It will be here in a week.
no Chinese😭
Hello, any impregnation content here?
Hello, author, is there any NTR content in the game? If not, will there be in the future? I don't want to see such content, I like the harem, thank you!
There is no NTR in our game, and we have no plans to add it.
Thank you, I see. Author: Your game is excellent. Will there be more threesomes in the future? I hope so.
The dev is incorrect. There is NTR. There's a whole NTR arc.
Are you kidding? I finished the whole game. There were no ntr scenes and options, but there was a sharing scene (although I didn't like this one either). I just hoped it would be a harem and more threesome scenes.
the ntr thing @UnderscorM3 is talking about is and isnt ntr...theres this whole arc with lin and rin where lin liked rin but rin was getting fucked by the mc the entire time and lin couldnt do much ab it besides just having dreams ab rin...could be ntr? idk
That's hardly NTR. If either other chicks were getting dicked by another dude then I'd be piss about it. Couldn't care less if MC's girls are banging each other, that shit is hot and could open up threesomes later on.
My brother in Christ, I’m not some goon scholar. I barely even know what the hell NTR is outside of one or two hentai where the main guy’s girl gets fucked by someone else. I just thought it might count as slight NTR because the same dynamic is happening: Lin likes Rin, but Rin’s getting railed by the MC while Lin’s left dreaming about her. Which, I’m sure, has a lot of similarities with the thought process of a cuck. I don’t even get why you care this much about what counts as NTR when you’re literally gooning over fictional characters smashing each other.
Even if the version on itch is the free public version, would you consider making it a “name your price”? I don’t mind supporting the project a bit, but I’m not one bit interested in subscriptions. Either that, or please add the button to support the project with one time donations
EDIT: Actually tried to play the game. My apologies to anyone who thought I was defending the dialogue and plot development I hadn't seen yet. I stand by my statement that there's a difference between NTR and sharing, but... I'm not sure what's happening here. Made it as far as the meeting with Mrs. Collins before I quit in disgust - the dialogue reads like someone's cuckoldry fetish fanfiction. Downvotes earned, lesson learned - I shouldn't chime in unless I know what I'm talking about.
Way too many people in these comments either can't tell the difference between involuntary NTR and consensual sharing, or can't stand the thought of their multiple partners sleeping with anyone else (despite being perfectly comfortable asking them all to share the MC). The hypocrisy and entitlement runs deep.Me personally? The thing that bugs me about NTR is the nonconsent/humiliation aspect, not the sharing aspect. If everyone's on the same page and agrees to it, play ball.... Pirot, keep doing what you do and screw the haters.(Disclaimer: haven't played the game myself - commenting on this after reading down through the comments to see if I wanted to. Sounds less like an "NTR bait-and-switch" and more like "people pissed at the concept of their girls having the freedom to do what the MC is doing," but someone feel free to correct me if I'm wrong.)OK cuck.